Some students are always worried about writing scenes, and they all ignore one point:
The ancient poems that have been handed down are all tempered and have a far-reaching artistic conception, so why don't we change them into modern texts?
Qingming (Du Mu).
During the Qingming Festival, it rains a lot, and pedestrians on the road want to break their souls.
By asking where the restaurant is, the shepherd boy pointed to Xinghua Village.
Someone changed it to a script;
Time: Qingming season. 】
Setting: Raining. 】
Where: On the road. 】
Pedestrian: (wants to break the soul) By asking where the restaurant is?
Shepherd Boy: (Pointing remotely) Xinghua Village!
Others changed it to Xiaoling
Xiaoling: Refers to a short word. Usually short words within 58 characters are used as small orders.
During the Qingming Festival, it rained, and pedestrians were on the road.
I want to break my soul. By asking the restaurant, where is the shepherd boy?
Yao refers to Xinghua Village.
There was a talent who, because of his excellent calligraphy, was called to write Wang Zhilian's "Liangzhou Ci" for the Empress Dowager Cixi. In writing, if you are not careful, you will miss the "between" in the word. After Cixi read it, she thought that Xiucai was sarcastic that she was uneducated, so she couldn't help but be furious and ordered Xiucai to be pushed out and beheaded. Xiucai was in a hurry, and hurriedly said that what he wrote was not a poem by Wang Zhilian, but a poem, which was recited aloud on the spot. When Cixi heard this, she turned her anger into joy, released her talents, and gave her a lot of rewards.
Do you know how to recite the show?
The Yellow River is far away, with white clouds, and a lonely city of ten thousand mountains. Why should Qiang Di complain, the spring breeze of the willows does not pass the jade gate. ）
Let's change Qingming into a short article:
Go early and come back early!Grandpa said loudly behind his back.
Good. "I rode the old ox out of the village in great spirits.
During the Qingming season, it is the time when it is warm and cold, and the sky is dripping with light rain, which adds a bit of chill. Sitting on the back of a cow, I watched as several scholar-like people walked past me. They shook their heads one by one, and recited poems in their mouths: the grass was all wet with drizzle, and the flowers and branches were about to move in the spring breeze and cold.
The old cow twisted his head to the side with disdain and lowered his head to graze. I don't understand it, but I vaguely know that they are from the city, and they have come to the countryside to do some kind of "outing" activities. Looking at their distant figures, I thought, the city people are really funny, such a cold rain, it is not good to stay in the house, run to this remote countryside to suffer.
The old cow was leisurely eating the tender and juicy spring grass, raising his head from time to time and making a long "moo" sound. The rain kept falling, the earth was shrouded in smoke and rain, and we walked aimlessly in the fields like this.
Just as I was about to ride home on my ox, I heard a rush of footsteps behind me. Looking back, it turned out that the scholars had returned. I saw that their whole bodies were soaked, their hair was messy, their trouser legs were full of mud, and one had a blue nose and swollen face, which was estimated to be a slippery road in the rain and a fall.
Brother Zhang, it's all your bad idea, what kind of spring are you going to step on?”
Alas, don't talk about it, hurry up and find a place to drink two glasses to withstand the cold, right?”
Hey, kid, do you have a restaurant here?”
Hmph, call me a child?I pretended I didn't hear.
This little friend, Xiaosheng is reasonable, do you have a restaurant in your village?”
That's pretty much it, I stretched out my hand and pointed in the direction of Xinghua Village Restaurant. After thanking me, a few scholars stumbled towards the village.
Let's talk about what this article rewrites
When rewriting poetry, we must understand the key words, sentences, and paragraphs, imagine the artistic conception, and grasp the direction of the rewriting, and the artistic conception of the rewriting should be consistent with the meaning of the original poem.
The following points need to be paid attention to in the rewriting of poems:
1.Faithfulness to the original: When rewriting a poem, it is important to be faithful to the original work and not to distort or tamper with the original.
2.Conform to modern language Xi: When rewriting poetry, it is necessary to conform to the language Xi of modern Chinese, and do not use too obscure or archaic vocabulary and grammatical structures. At the same time, pay attention to the fluency and naturalness of the language.
3.Maintain the beauty of poetry: Poetry is an art form with a unique aesthetic. When rewriting poetry, it is necessary to maintain the beauty of the poem and enhance its artistic expression by using rhetorical devices and depicting details.
4.Highlight the theme and emotion: When rewriting the poem, highlight the theme and emotion so that the reader can more easily understand the meaning of the poem and feel its emotions. This can be achieved by modifying key vocabulary, adjusting sentence structure, etc.
5.Innovativeness: On the basis of maintaining the original poem, it can be innovated to enhance the readability of the article with flashbacks, interludes, storytelling, and other methods. But be careful not to deviate too far from the theme and style of the original poem.
Homecoming doll book
He Zhizhang
When the young left home and the eldest returned, the hometown accent did not change and the sideburns declined.
When the children don't know each other, they smile and ask where the guests are from.
He Zhizhang was 68 years old at the time, and we rewrote the poem into a 400-word essay
When I set foot on the land of my hometown, the feeling of familiarity and strangeness instantly came to my heart. When I left my hometown, I was a teenager, and now I have returned as a gray-haired old man. Although the local pronunciation has not changed, time is no more, and I am a wanderer living in a foreign land.
The small river in my hometown, the water is still clear;Smoke is rising from the rooftops of the village;The narrow stone bridge, mottled, I haven't walked on it for 40 years.
While I was sighing, a group of children walked up, and I was comforted by the vigor and innocence they exuded. However, when they saw me, their faces were filled with confusion and curiosity. Obviously, they don't know me anymore, who am I, a strange old man?
A child stepped forward with a lovely smile on his face and asked in a voice that I used to know very well, "Guest, are you from **?"I was so gracious that I smiled and replied, "I'm from far away, and you won't know me." The children laughed even more when they heard my answer, and perhaps it seemed to them that the old guests from afar were also talking about their parents, and this old man was really funny.
I continued walking, filled with emotion. This place, which used to be my hometown, is now foreign to me. I see faces that were once familiar, but they don't know me anymore. I felt lonely and lost, but at the same time relieved and excited. Because I know that this is my way home, this is where I used to live.
This is a conventional rewriting method, let's take a look, has the theme of the mood changed?
Let's think about it again, in terms of content, what descriptions are added?
1. Environment
2. Dialogue
3. Psychological description
How else can we rephrase?
1. Change the structure, start with a dialogue, and start with an interpolated narrative.
Guest, are you from **?”
A childish local voice interrupted my contemplation, ah, it turns out that I have really returned to my hometown. After 50 years away from home, I finally set foot on this land that haunts my dreams.
I looked up and saw the smoke rising from the familiar village, the river still babbling, and the quaint little bridge that seemed to be waiting for me to cross again.
I looked down at the children who were talking, and they were probably the grandchildren of some of my childhood friends, as they were my childhood playmates.
Hometown, I'm really back.
The so-called homesickness, I couldn't speak for a long time. After taking a deep breath of the fresh air of my hometown, I also said in my hometown dialect: "I came from a distant capital. ”
2. Change the person's pronoun and write it from the child's vision.
After school, we picked up our school bags and jumped out of my husband's private school. Our teacher, Mr. Wang, was still shouting and telling us: "Go home early for dinner, don't play outside." ”
We can't do that much, so we just run away. Looking at the roof of the village still smoking, I thought to myself, it's still early, I guess my mother hasn't cooked the meal yet, let's play for a while.
We were about to go down to the creek to play in the water, but just as we crossed the small stone bridge, we saw an old man coming on a horse.
The old man's hair and beard were all white, his face was full of wrinkles, and he looked like he had experienced the vicissitudes of time. However, his clothes were very gorgeous, and he looked like a great official. The old man slowly got off his horse, smiled kindly at us, and asked, "Is this Moyuan Village?"”
I thought it was very strange, because this old man spoke our native dialect, and how could I never see him?So, I had the courage to say: "This is Moyuan Village, may I ask the guest, are you from **?"”
The old man raised his head and slowly glanced around, his eyes full of nostalgia, and then he bowed his head and said to me, "I am from a distant capital. ”
Then what are you doing in Moyuan Village?”
yes, what am I going to do, do the leaves fall back to the roots?The old man was muttering to himself.
We were wondering, and suddenly, Old Master Wang ran over from the private school.
He Huzi, is that you?Mr. Wang stumbled and ran this way while shouting, "Everyone come out to greet him, He Zhizhang is back to his hometown!."”
I looked up at the old man in front of me, oh, it turned out that he was He Zhizhang who went out to be a big official in our village.
I saw the old man's figure stunned, and two lines of tears welled up from his eyes, slowly flowing through the vicissitudes of life.
Assignments:
Rewrite ancient poems. Choose any one and change it into an essay of more than 400 words. To conform to the artistic conception of the original poem, there must be a plot. There should be dialogue and psychological descriptions. More than 400 words "Fishing Song".
Don Chang Chi Ho.
The egret flies in front of the Xisai Mountain, and the peach blossoms flow and the mandarin fish is fat.
Green hats, green clothes, slanting wind and drizzle do not need to return.
Hint: What scenes are depicted in the poem?(Green hills, egrets, peach blossoms, flowing water, mandarin fish, hats, lily clothes, slanting winds, drizzle.) ）
What are the colors of the scenery in the poem?(white, green, red, cyan).
What season is represented in the poem?(Spring).
What are the characteristics of the scenery in the poem?(Beautiful, vibrant, idyllic, etc.).
The second song;Xijiang month
Xin Qiji
The bright moon is not a branch to frighten magpies, and the breeze chirps cicadas in the middle of the night. The fragrance of rice flowers says that it is a good year. Listen to the sound of frogs.
Seven or eight stars outside the sky, two or three points of rain in front of the mountain. In the old days, the thatched shop was on the edge of the forest. The road turns to the creek bridge suddenly.
Tips: 1. What are the views?
2. What are the activities of people?
3. How to integrate the activities of the characters and the description of the scenery?