Knowledge Review:
What are the six elements of narrative?
Time, place, person, cause, process, and result of the event.
In the narrative, in order to highlight the center and enhance the appeal, we should write the story concretely, and use vivid and vivid expressions to leave a deep impression on the reader.
How do you make things more concrete?
1. Use the decomposition method to write specifically
Read the following two paragraphs and see which one impresses you more.
1. There is only one person left in our class Xiaoqiang before the high jump, and at this time, the jump pole has risen to 146 meters, 0. higher than last year's school sports record2 meters. The whistle sounded, saying that it was too late and that it was fast, and I saw Xiaoqiang's classmate rushing forward, less than 0 in the crossbarAt a distance of 5 meters, he jumped and flew over the crossbar in one fell swoop. Broke the school sports record!
2. Xiaoqiang stood at the starting line, calm and calm. He habitually pressed his left leg and pressed his right leg. After doing these preparations, he smiled at us and gave us another look. Then straighten up, take a deep breath, take a brisk and powerful step, and charge towards the high jump. When he was about to get close to the high jump pole, Xiaoqiang suddenly turned around sharply, kicked his feet, and completed the two movements almost at the same time. Before the audience had time to blink their eyes, his head and shoulders had already crossed the crossbar, and then he straightened his chest, tucked his abdomen, and bent his waist, so that it was a "back crossing". "Xiaoqiang succeeded!" "Xiaoqiang has broken the school record! Amid applause and cheers, Xiaoqiang landed firmly on the ground (on the ground). The classmates ran to the playing field, hugged him, lifted it high, and threw him into the air with a smile.
Obviously, paragraph 2 makes us more impressed, it not only lets us know that Xiaoqiang broke the school sports record in the high jump in the school games, but also knows how Xiaoqiang jumped, and the process of high jump is written very specifically by decomposing it into five links: "preparation", "running", "jumping", "climbing" and "landing", each step is clear, detailed and vivid, so that readers can see him.
Stir-fry
At noon today, looking at my mother's busy figure in the kitchen, I suddenly had an idea: can I let my mother teach me how to stir-fry? Mom readily agreed, "Then let's start with simple scrambled eggs." Mom said.
We went into the kitchen, and my mom helped me tie my apron, put on my sleeves, and was fully armed and ready to play.
First, my mom asked me to boil the pot dry. I lit the fire, and after a "swish" sound, the water in the pot was gone. Then, my mother took two eggs and asked me to open it, I carefully took the eggs, and then knocked a few times on the pot, "click" The egg cracked a crack, so my mother asked me to pinch the crack to both sides and break it hard, and the egg white protein in the egg "clicked" and slipped into the bowl, then put the green onion and then use chopsticks to break the egg, and then sprinkled two spoons of oil evenly into the pot, when the oil was hot, I carefully poured the egg into the pot, only to hear the "click" sound The egg was bubbling on it, There was a puff of smoke rising from the pot, so frightened that I quickly put my hand back for fear of spilling the oil on my body, and my mother replied, "It's nothing, it'll be fine in a while." "I quickly scrambled the eggs with a shovel a few times, and in a few moments, the eggs were scrambled.
Mom turned off the fire and said, "Yes, I learned it so quickly, try it." ”
I eat eggs, which are a bit mushy, but I like them because they are the fruits of my own labor. I savored it, filled with joy.
In the above essay, how did the little author write about the scrambled eggs, can you tell me?
2. Use descriptive writing to write vividly
That is, the performance of the characters and the appearance of the scenery are depicted in detail, and the appearance, movements, language, psychology, demeanor and the color, shape, sound, taste, quality and dynamic changes of the scenery are specifically written.
An impressive thing
It was Christmas, and we at the Barot Piano Academy were going to have a Christmas party, and all the students were going to perform on stage. Although I have attended several ** meetings, this is the first time I have been on stage.
When I got to the party, my heart was pounding, like there was a fawn running around inside of me. After a while, "Little Deer" finally calmed down, but when I heard the "Three Minutes to Go to the show" announcement, "Little Deer" started running around again.
Enter the hall, then sit down, and wait for the time to go on stage. The fawn seems to have started kicking. I flipped to the tune I was about to play, and I looked at it note by note, trying to comfort myself, but my hands were still shaking.
Next, Hao Yilin is invited to perform on stage. "Ahh Finished! My heart has changed from "fawn kicking" to "drum band"! I started playing: Mi Kong, La La La, La Fa Mi ruai....I thought to myself, don't go wrong! "Mi.
*Syllable. My ** ended with the applause of the audience. Everyone looked at me and kept clapping. I finally relaxed.
The lights on the Christmas tree are brighter, the little balls are more beautiful, and the ribbons are shining.
This incident is still deeply imprinted in my mind. So much so that Christmas that year seemed so special.
The psychological description of "me" in this article is detailed and layered. From "arriving at the party" to "entering the hall" and then performing on stage, the psychological activities of "me" are described concretely and realistically, and the rhetorical techniques of metaphor enhance the vividness and vividness. After the performance, he wrote that "the lights on the Christmas tree are brighter, the little balls are more beautiful, and the streamers are shining", which vividly sets off the joy of his performance after the success.
My specialty
Today is Sunday and I decided to make one of my best dishes and let my family taste the delicious dishes I made.
I went to the vegetable market and bought a pound of pork ribs, and washed every part of the ribs with clean water.
I first poured an appropriate amount of five-spice powder, a little salt and monosodium glutamate into the bowl, and then poured the ribs into this bowl and marinated them with seasoning for half an hour to make the ribs taste better. Take advantage of this time to mix the flour into a paste, and when the ribs are delicious, use chopsticks to put them into the batter. And that's it.
Now that it's time to fry the ribs, I put the wok on the gas stove, evaporate the water in the pan, pour in a small half pot of oil, and wait for the oil to burn until it is seven or eight minutes hot, and then put the ribs into the pan one by one.
Suddenly, the oil in the pot boiled, and the sound of "bang, bang, la" kept ringing in my ears, and the ribs kept turning over in the oil, and the white batter on the surface slowly changed color, and the white bubbles around it continued. The oil gradually ran out, and I had to use chopsticks to turn over the ribs, which soon fried golden brown. I even think it's comparable to what I see on TV. I scooped out the ribs with a colander and put them on a plate.
My family couldn't wait any longer, and they looked greedily at the fried pork ribs in my hand, like a greedy cat, and their saliva was about to run down. Dad first raised his chopsticks, grabbed a piece of pork ribs, took a big bite without hesitation, and said while eating: "Daughter, the ribs you made are really delicious." The mother said, "Daughter, these ribs are bright in color, and they make people appetize a lot when they see them, and they are even more delicious than last time." Grandma was also happy, gave a thumbs up, nodded and said, "Granddaughter, yes, it's fragrant on the outside and tender on the inside, who did you learn from?" I grinned and said, "Well, keep it secret!" Everyone was smiling, and it didn't take long for the ribs to be eaten.
A piece of labor, a penny, only through hard work, can reap happiness, and lazy people can never enjoy it.
In this article, the production procedure for your own fried pork ribs is written clearly, the main points are clear, and the parts are specific and vivid. The "Preparations" section is concise and fluent, and the verbs are accurate. The "Fried Ribs" section focuses on the dynamics and color changes of the ribs in the oil pan, so that the reader can clearly understand the situation of the ribs when they are fried, and can also explain what the ribs look like when they are fried. As for the final "eating pork ribs" link, through the demeanor, movements, and language descriptions of father, mother, and grandmother, it vividly shows how delicious the pork ribs are fried, so as to closely interlock with the title "My Specialty Dish" and highlight the center.
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Remember a tug-of-war
I woke up early today and couldn't sleep again because I was going to have a tug-of-war in the afternoon.
The long-awaited moment has finally arrived. My teammates and I walked onto the field in high spirits. The race is about to begin! I took a deep breath, stared straight ahead, gripped the rope with both hands, leaned back as far back as I could, and pressed my feet to the ground like nails.
When the referee gave the order, I exerted all my strength, my teeth rattled and I felt my eyes spark. Everyone pulled back desperately in unison with the rhythm of the cheerleaders.
Not to be outdone, the other side started a tug-of-war with us. The little red flag in the middle of the rope seemed to be approaching us, but after a while, it swayed again.
Wandering away from us. I'm so anxious in my heart, I can't wait to grow three heads and six arms, or I can have the magic of Doraemon, and pull the red flag back. Sweat was oozing from my forehead. I secretly told myself not to be discouraged and to persevere to the end. I worked with my teammates to stabilize our position, accumulate strength, and then wait for the opponent's weak vacancy, suddenly exert force, only to hear the sound of "ouch", "ouch" from the opponent's field, it turned out that many players fell and gnawed mud.
Yay"! "Victory"! Everyone jumped and jumped like little rabbits, and the red flag on the tug-of-war rope seemed to be more colorful, as if they were cheering for us.
What descriptions are used in the above essay? What role did it play?
I'll write
There were countless firsts in our upbringing. The first time I cooked, the first time I rode a roller coaster, the first time I gave a speech, the first time I made a model car. Please choose one thing and write an essay. Pay attention to explain the elements of the narrative clearly, and write down the events in detail!
Essay title: "The First Time".