Whether it is writing a narrative or a discussion, it is inevitable to use materials.
The teacher hopes that this material can add color to the article and make the article look more "tall", such as classic classics, quotations, as well as great scientists, sports stars who win glory for the country, etc., and students sometimes prefer to use their favorite materials, such as their favorite entertainment stars, Internet **, etc.
At this point, the teacher is definitely trying to convince the student, and the student also wants to stick to his or her own point of view, and the final result is often that the student is beaten back to reality by the test score.
Now for an essay.
This article "Is Cultivation Important" comes from a joint entrance examination in high school. High school generally writes discussions, and the author of this article should also want to write discussions, or think that he is writing discussions.
The topic points out that the topic is "self-cultivation", although it is not brilliant, but it is not much of a problem. The beginning is all discussions, in which the sentence "a person's cultivation is very important" shows the attitude, but this sentence only states the facts, and cannot become an argument for discussion, the central argument of this article can be "we should pay attention to personal cultivation".
At the end, it is also a discussion, "So, cultivation is very important for a person, and it will accompany us for the rest of our lives." When we are in a low trough, it can give us strength and hope", this ending is well written, especially the words "strength" and "hope", which are well ordered and have a lingering flavor.
The middle part is basically a sandwich discussion. The article devotes a lot of space to the story of the two protagonists in "Scattering the Wild", Jiang Cheng and Gu Fei, interspersed with his own feelings.
The article wrote about Jiang Cheng's background, family, study, growth, etc., and also wrote about Jiang Cheng's meeting of Gu Fei, becoming good friends with Gu Fei, and the two helping each other. The article can be called "The Story of Jiang Cheng and Gu Fei", but it is not like a narrative, because the material comes from ** rather than life, and the material from life is called "original", so that the large-scale narration of ** can be called "plagiarism".
The teacher did not dwell on the overall idea, the teacher's first feeling after reading it was that the selection of materials was not good, and said: I really can't stand it, so many materials are not used, can this group of students write essays without writing "Scattering the Wild" and "So-and-so" and the like? The broken heart started from "Scattering the Wild", and I don't know when it will end. In the end, the teacher gave a low score as a reminder. It seems that the teacher has come across a lot of similar material.
Seriously, now many students like to look for materials from the Internet, because they like it, so they want to use it, and sometimes they even risk being criticized by the teacher to use it, and some of the essays also get high scores.
There are several possible scenarios where the score is good. First, the composition is skillfully used, such as only quoting one sentence; The second is that the teacher doesn't care what type of material you use, only cares about whether your material is in line with the center of the article.
But in fact, many teachers don't want students to use this material, whether it's a storyline or a so-called "golden sentence". A teacher said this: When I was grading the essays, I found that many children had an obsession with what they always wrote, "The sun in the world is just right, and the wind passes through the treetops".
Sometimes it's like this, no matter how beautiful a sentence is, it's boring to see too much. The sentence "envy boy" in the picture is very good, but when the teacher sees this sentence many times in a correction essay, he doesn't know what to say.
Actually, there is nothing wrong with writing, but if your teacher doesn't want you to write like this, you can separate this "like" from the composition, knowing that some "likes" are suitable for keeping in your heart and not for showing them to the public. As for the teacher, if you don't want the students to write, then it is better to talk to the students individually, be sincere, and believe that the students will listen, rather than laughing at them or giving them low marks directly.
As long as you feel life with your heart, you can also write beautiful sentences. "I am a frequent visitor to the courtyard, looking forward to flowering in the spring and fruiting in the autumn. Grandma is also a frequent visitor to the hospital, but she is different from me, she looks at me in summer and me in winter", this passage is from an exam essay, unpretentious, but also beautiful.
What do you think?
*From the Internet, invaded and deleted, thank you. ）