The teacher will write you a sample essay
Exam Hot Topic: Emotional Writing Skills
"Parting, for a better reunion".
Example: Liu Leisheng
Classmates start with the original text.
Parting is the saddest thing, but parting is also for a better reunion, because we want to become a better version of ourselves.
Mr. Liu annotated at the beginning.
The beginning needs not to be too verbose, and secondly, it is better to use some rhetoric to make the language more beautiful.
Mr. Liu's opening example.
Parting always begins in tears, but after the tears are dried, we must move forward with a smile, maybe somewhere in the future, at some time inadvertently, we can meet again better.
The second paragraph of the original text.
From the first to the third year of junior high school, we spent an unforgettable three years together in this school, and after the New Year, we will face the recruitment, and after the examination, we may not be able to see each other.
Mr. Liu's annotation in the second paragraph.
Changing long sentences into short sentences is a good way to write, which will make the language of our articles appear refined and more comfortable to read. So, we try not to write sentences that are too long.
Mr. Liu's second example.
Unconsciously, it is about to be three years, from the beginning of youth, we have been with each other, until now, the recruitment is coming, with the results, we will also go our separate ways. Maybe we'll still be in the same class, maybe we'll still be in the same school, maybe we'll still be in the same city. But after all, it's all just a possibility, just a possibility.
The original text of the third paragraph of the classmate.
I can't bear my friends! We have been together for three years from the first grade of junior high school to the present, these three years, we have studied together, I remember most clearly, is my tablemate, once, I failed the exam, uncomfortable like a dog, I didn't expect him to come to me, he smiled and said to me: "Where there is a will, there is a way, lying on the salary to taste the guts, three thousand Yuejia can swallow Wu." "I knew he was going to comfort me and make me strong and brave like Gou Jian. Yesterday, when we sat together, he cried so much that we were going to be separated in less than half a year, and I felt very uncomfortable listening to it. At this time, he said: "It's okay, let's separate, it's not that we won't see each other in the future, if you miss me in the future, come to me, let's live in the opposite door." "I laughed when I heard it, parting is for a better reunion, and he and I are neighbors, so the parting of the school doesn't matter to us, because we will have a better reunion in the community.
Mr. Liu's annotation to the third paragraph.
Confidants to the door, if the end of the world is next to each other, what do you say you two are crying? I thought it was very sad, but I didn't expect you two to be neighbors?
Mr. Liu's third example.
Looking back on this memory, there is a confidant.
From never knowing each other to being inseparable, I have been at the same table in time, like a dish, from raw to cooked. I still remember when I was in the eighth grade, the cloud of failing the exam was shrouded, the teacher only sharply blamed, and the parents only had disappointed eyes. It was the same table, holding a comforting umbrella to shelter me from the wind and rain, and her whispering in my ear told about the practice of thousands of years ago, so I followed her guidance and learned to lie down and taste courage. Yesterday, she also faced the topic of parting, I saw her eyes with tears, but she was still as stubborn as before: "Parting is for a better reunion, in high school, in college, in the future, we will definitely meet again!" She was right, and I will continue to work hard for this reunion.
The original text of the fourth paragraph of the classmate.
I can't bear my teacher! When I was not in junior high school before, I heard that the homeroom teacher was very powerful, but when I really met you, I found that you were actually quite gentle, not as fearful as I imagined, and you were really knowledgeable, I remember that in an ancient poetry class, you told the name of the poet in a lesson, I was really eye-opening. Before the exam, you give us a review of our homework, and all of a sudden you say, "Oh, we're going to be separated in half a semester." "I was so upset when I heard it. But at this time, you said, "It's nothing, there is no feast in the world that will not be dispersed, if you don't leave, how can the new students come?" You can't stand in the tank and not, right? I laughed, yes, parting, for a better reunion, we are gone, and we will definitely come back with glory in the future.
Mr. Liu's comment on the fourth paragraph.
Your homeroom teacher's language doesn't look like the words of a Chinese teacher, and besides, you should go home, why are you coming to school? Teacher doesn't need you to glorify your ancestors, right?
Mr. Liu's fourth example.
Counting this past, there is hope.
In the mouths of others, I had heard of the strictness of the head teacher, but when I first met him, I had a different kind of feelings. The homeroom teacher teaches Chinese, but it is not limited to textbooks, and in her class, the name of a poet is a fusion of politics and history. Under her guidance, I gradually abandoned the "rote memorization" that I once regarded as the Bible, and began to truly understand and learn. Before the exam, she took us to review our homework, and when class was about to end, she suddenly felt a little sad: "Another semester has passed. After I listened, I was suddenly a little sad, but as soon as she changed her words, she was swept away by optimism and expectations: "You are leaving, but you can't just leave, take the knowledge you have learned in the past three years, pave the way for the next stop, and part, for a better reunion, I hope that when the time comes, you can all learn something!" ”
The original text at the end of the classmate.
Parting is for a better reunion.
Mr. Liu's annotation at the end.
The ending is too simple, not just to point to the topic, but also to be lyrical.
Teacher Liu's ending example.
Since ancient times, sadness is parting, but how can there always be companionship in life? Since it is inevitable, it is better to face it calmly, everyone has their own way to go, happy or sad, moving forward alone, but parting, for a better reunion, we will definitely meet at some point in the future, at that time, please promise me, you want to be in spring, you want to be still beautiful!