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Original Question Presented].Read the material below and write an essay of no less than 800 words as requested. (60 points).
Li Enhui, who took the college entrance examination in 2018, was admitted to Zhejiang Police Officer Vocational College. Faced with 14,000 yuan in tuition and living expenses, he decided to use the summer vacation to raise tuition for himself by selling watermelons. Every time before going out of the stall, he will post on Moments to shout for his mobile watermelon stand. When the news was sent, his friends and local volunteers often rushed to help. On August 4, Zhejiang Satellite TV reported the story of Yongkang Li Enhui selling melons to raise tuition fees to go to college, which attracted widespread attention, and the number of Internet ** exceeded 10 million. **of** made Li Enhui instantly become Yongkang's "celebrity", and countless people began to pay attention to this "watermelon boy", in just 10 days, Li Enhui has saved enough tuition for the first academic year.
Regarding the "Watermelon Boy" saving tuition, netizens have commented one after another, mainly in the following three ways.
Comment 1: Poverty is not something to be celebrated or celebrated.
Comment 2: In this world, not everything that is reasonable and good can exist or be fulfilled according to one's wishes.
Comment 3: Li Enhui, who has received widespread attention, may be kidnapped by ** and lose the right to choose freely.
What do you think of these three comments? Please select two (or three) of these comments to form an organic connection, and then write a comprehensive review. It is required to have a clear attitude and write a self-proposed title; Don't copy, don't plagiarize.
Examination topic] restrictive.
1.Intentional limitations. "What do you think about these three comments", the guiding sentence clearly requires the candidates' associations and thoughts to revolve around the three comments of netizens, rather than talking about Li Enhui's views on "selling melons" to save tuition.
2.Content Restrictions. This is a ** type essay question. As a ** type of article, ignoring the material and talking about things without quoting the given material is easy to slide into the quagmire of topic composition, so candidates must associate the material when talking about things. However, the focus of the review of this topic is on the comments of netizens, and it is inappropriate to directly quote the relevant content of "The 'Watermelon Boy' Saving Tuition Fees", or ignore the arguments of netizens or completely ignore the news materials and only talk about the views of netizens.
3.Thinking Limitations. "Please choose two (or three) of the comments, so that they form an organic association, and then make a comprehensive review", the guide emphasizes the "organic association" and "comprehensive review", the candidate must synthesize the idea, if only a single discussion should be grateful for poverty or only a simple discussion of the network ** will be biased. If there is no logical relationship of combination, it is not appropriate to list two or three points of view as sub-arguments.
4.Value Limitations. "Maybe I will be kidnapped by ** and lose the right to choose freely" as a view of netizens, it is just a prediction of Li Enhui's future life, but judging that Li Enhui's melon selling behavior is hype, and then questioning his motives and volunteers, is inconsistent with the value guidance of the material, so the article should not focus on the negative impact of online public opinion.
5.Stylistic restrictions. The title gives a discussion scene, and when the "discussion" is the main one, the introductory words "what do you think" and "do a comprehensive review" also imply that the article should be written as a discussion**. If students write about how they or those around them have been lifted out of poverty, or talk about the significance of the national poverty alleviation policy, and list the various problems of the poor people, there is a problem of unclear stylistic awareness.
Open. 1.The idea is open. Commenting on the combination of the first and second pairs, ** Li Enhui's spirit of "being poor and strong" shown by selling melons to save tuition coincides with quotations about struggle such as "happiness comes from struggle" and "struggle itself is a kind of happiness"; The combination of comments 1 and 3 can be used to interpret the words "poor" and "poor", combined with "material poverty" and "spiritual poverty", analyze whether the views of comment 3 are reasonable and the specific practical impact it may have on Li Enhui from the perspective of netizens, and make suggestions on this negative impact; The combination of comments two and three can be combined with the attention aroused by Zhejiang Satellite TV's report, the number of networks has exceeded 10 million, etc., **Whether his friends and volunteers helped him with his original intention is consistent with the attention of netizens, and think about the correct value guidance of the report. It is also possible to make a comprehensive review, but with a certain emphasis.
2.Think openly. As long as the candidates can diverge around the comments of netizens on Li Enhui's melon selling, whether it is the social significance behind the incident, the concerns of different perspectives, or the enlightenment to the candidates' lives, they can be open-minded.
This question is a ** task-driven essay, and the material involves the incident of the boy selling melons to save tuition fees and the attention of online public opinion, as well as three comments from netizens. On the basis of facts, candidates can praise Li Enhui's fighting spirit and affirm the good deeds of her friends and volunteers, as well as enthusiastic netizens. But whether the popularity of the Internet will cause trouble to Li Enhui's life; You can also reason about things and empathize, if you encounter such a thing, can we not succumb to the arrangement of fate like Li Enhui, or ignore the possible disturbance to Li Enhui's life because of concern like netizens; It is possible to reflect on whether the help of the poor can rely on institutions rather than just attention.
This ** material is selected from the events of the candidate's peers, many candidates have seen this news report of the "melon boy", so they can basically have something to write, but being able to write does not mean that they can write well, and choosing a good angle does not mean that they have chosen a good angle. Some candidates started from their familiar "should I be grateful for poverty", and some candidates talked about online public opinion when they saw comment three, citing "Notre Dame de Paris" and "female graduate students crying on the hood of Mercedes-Benz" to criticize online violence. In particular, the task requirements of "organic combination" in the composition are easy to be ignored, and the candidates' essays are easy to be fragmented and difficult to be unified. Judging from the actual situation, there are fewer excellent works.
Idea].Relevance:
1.Thanks to the struggle, adversity is reborn.
2.**Attract attention, and the heart of kindness does not change.
3.There is a measure in evaluation, and there is a limit to attention.
Off topic:
1.Young people are ambitious and not afraid of poverty.
2.The web is a double-edged sword.
3.Online donations are not advisable.
4.The ideal is beautiful, but the reality is cruel.
Example].Thanks to the struggle, adversity is reborn.
Chen Sitong. Regarding the "watermelon boy" Li Enhui selling melons to save tuition, netizens have commented, and some netizens said that poverty is not worthy of praise and praise. There is truth in this, but what we are singing about is not poverty, but the spirit of struggle that is still optimistic and unremitting in a state of poverty and poverty. And this spirit is undoubtedly bright and dazzling. (For the views of netizens in comment one, highlight the views.) ）
What is poverty, the poor are surrounded by walls, and the poor are exhausted. Isn't it worth singing about those who still have light in their hearts in this desperate situation? Li Enhui sells melons to raise money for tuition, and even if she is poor, she still changes her fate by herself. On the other hand, those who promote that "poverty is not worthy of praise" do not know if they have ever tried to change their fate. The incident of Li Enhui is more like a beam of light, a faint and distant light, which shines on the hearts of those who are in poverty, and the end of that light is connected with hope. These positive events have been widely publicized and reported, just like a seed of hope, it may be vague or distant, but it is truly buried in those desperate lands, piercing into the boundless darkness, and sprouting the power of upward growth. Maybe one day it will sprout a green bud, starting from a seed, turning despair from a word difference into hope, and that is the spiritual power of man.
The spirit of struggle in the face of adversity is especially important, such as the ** in the prison cell, the haystack in the swamp. (A brief quotation from the material builds momentum for the argument and uses the metaphor of "light" and "seed" to point out the deeper meaning of the event, but criticizes point one and digs into it.) ）
But life is not as good as expected, and the objective world cannot be changed at will with subjective will. Therefore, some netizens said that not all reasonable and beautiful things can exist or be realized according to their own wishes. (Led to the second comment of netizens to pave the way for the following discussion.) ）
Unreasonable and unbeautiful always exist, hard work, struggle, may not achieve beauty, but if there is no effort, the beauty in the heart can only be a dream, a fantasy. The end of Yu Gong moving mountains is absurd, but Yu Gong's spirit is eternal, and I want to cross the hills not because the mountains are there, but because I am here. There are not so many certain things in life, and I can't guarantee whether there is an inevitable connection between hard work and success, but if I can do it without regrets, it will be worth the trip. It is precisely because of the existence of unreasonable and unbeautiful adversity that the spirit of struggle of "straining one's muscles and bones, starving one's body and skin, getting up from poverty, acting in disorder, and benefiting one's inability to do what it cannot" can become the soil for seeds to sprout the sprouts of hope. (Point out comment 2 to organically unify the two comments of netizens under the theme of struggle.) ）
Poverty is not worthy of praise and praise, so let's sing the praises of struggle, work hard for a better existence, and strive to catch up, so that life can be reborn and turn into a butterfly. Although not all reasonable and beautiful can exist or be realized according to their own wishes, at least they have worked hard and struggled, maybe life is still not beautiful, but life is endless, and the struggle is not stopped, which may be the meaning of tens of millions of people paying attention to Li Enhui. (The understanding of the two comments is perfectly unified under the theme of "struggle", and the task is completed perfectly.) ）
Comments].At first glance, the article is from the hand of a female classmate who loves life, and the whole article uses a lot of metaphors, novel and unconventional, smart and interesting. The quotation and combination of materials in the article are dexterous and not pedantic, but the language is a little immature, and the thinking is not deep enough, and there are even some conflicts before and after, if this conflict and contradiction can be handled well, it will become the shining point of the article; The analysis of poverty and poverty can also be more in-depth, such as analyzing the difference between the two, if poverty can only be barren soil, then poverty will lose the sunshine and rain, so if you can point out that people can be poor or not, it will be more complementary to the metaphor of "seed" in the article.