Hello friends!"Education of Love" updates the 16th issue, and today shares "Friend Coretti"!
If you are an elementary and middle school student, can you be on your own when your parents are not home or sick?In the story, Coretti, a 10-year-old fourth-grade elementary school student, was able to support his family.
Enrico went out for a walk, and in front of a firewood shop, he met his fellow subject, Letti, who then moved firewood to the shop.
Coretti Xi her grammar homework while carrying firewood, reading the homework in her mouth.
After carrying the firewood, Coretti weighed the firewood on a scale, and then swept the dead leaves and firewood shavings. His legs were as tired as sticks, and his fingers were stiff.
When a customer buys firewood, Kore sells firewood, settles accounts, keeps accounts, and then starts to write essays when he is done.
After writing for a while, Coretti took care of her sick mother, reminded her to take medicine, and then wrote an essay.
Next, Coretti had to use a handsaw to cut the firewood into small pieces, which was a tiring job, but he said it was exercise.
The firewood was sawn, the truck pulling the firewood arrived, and he carried the firewood to receive the goods.
Enrico looked at Coretti's busy appearance and was very envious, thinking that Coretti was a hundred times happier than himself!
Do you think that a child who carries firewood, saws firewood, and sells firewood is happy?
Reading insight: We are very envious of such a sensible, capable, studious, and filial child in the story.
When we compare Coretti with ourselves, we find that we really just read and Xi and don't ask anything. If we didn't have a mother, we wouldn't be able to do laundry, clean up, or make beds, and we wouldn't even be able to take care of ourselves, let alone care for our families.
A person must not only learn book knowledge, but also learn survival skills and learn to take care of himself and be self-reliant, so that he can become an independent person. Therefore, you have to learn to take care of your own food, clothing, housing and transportation, and exercise self-reliance.
Writing method analysis:
Use dynamic slow motion to depict vivid images
The text uses detailed slow-motion descriptions many times to depict Coretti's diligence and ability, and the dynamic picture of taking care of his mother.
Such as:
1.He was carrying firewood and was sweating profusely. The man standing in the truck took the firewood and handed it to him, and Coretti took it to his shop and hurriedly piled it together."Carrying firewood", "sweating", "transporting", "piling".
These dynamic movements portray the image of a child who is carrying firewood, and we seem to see him, and his tired and sweaty appearance seems to be right in front of us.
Change it to write like this and take a look:
Coretti moved the firewood into his shop, and he was tired.
When we read it, it seems that there is no dynamic picture of Coretti carrying firewood in front of us, and he does not move us by carrying firewood, and the expression effect is greatly reduced.
2.Coretti set the pillow for her mother, straightened the quilt, added coals, and drove out the cat lying on the box.This sentence also uses 4 verbs to write the details of Coretti taking care of her mother, the picture is realistic, and the fictional Coretti is like a living person standing with us.
Usually, the teacher teaches me to depict characters vividly, do you understand "vivid"?
We can break down "vivid" into the words "life" and "movement", "life" is alive, "movement" can see dynamic changes, write more details of people's actions, and disassemble an action into several details to write in slow motion, it will be vivid.
If we compress the detailed description of the action in the second sentence, it becomes:
Coretti took care of her mother.
You see, the compressed sentence is not vivid, there is no sense of picture, because when we read this sentence, we can't see how Coretti takes care of his mother, we can't see him moving.
We usually write such sentences, using generalized abstract verbs, and the composition is short, without a sense of picture, and not vivid.
We need to use more dynamic verbs, use more verbs that can see the action, put an action act in slow motion, highlight every detail, the effect will come out, and the composition will be long.
Do you understand "vivid" and have a better understanding of action depiction?
See you next time!
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