Let's first appreciate the two descriptions at the beginning of the female writer Ma Jinlian's Lu Prize-winning work "Pulp Water and Sauerkraut in 1987":
When I was about to make dinner, the second grandmother came. She was short in calfs and walked slowly, slightly pouting. Her shoes would never be worn, whether they were rotten shoes or new shoes that had just been put on, she always stepped on her heels and pulled them like slippers, and it was strange that she walked like this, without a sound, like a cat walking softly. I've tried to deliberately step on my own shoes, and they slap on the heels as soon as I take a step, croaking and croaking. One time she took off her shoes and sat on our kang to talk to my mother, and I took the opportunity to walk in her shoes, still croaking like a rapping woman following behind her feet. It can be seen that the second grandmother has practiced walking in shoes, which is not something that ordinary people can achieve. She would also hang a messy thread on the leg of her trousers, or a few scraps of grass clippings, and she would drag and pull along the way, followed by her youngest daughter, Reiko, like a small tail and a long drag.
Grandma picked up a hug of ice grass by herself, twisted out two ropes, and she didn't have to work anymore, my sister and I had already followed behind her and each pulled out a big hug of ice grass, hugged it back and sat on the radish to rub the rope. The ice grass rope is very easy to rub, and we will rub one out for grandma in a while. Grandma sorted out the radish leaves one by one, put them on the straw rope and tied the straw rope in a knot, and a large handful of vegetable leaves were tied up by the straw rope. Tidy up a handful and tie the knot. The effort is not large, and a large bunch of green leaves are piled up around him. Dark green radish leaves, grass-green ice grass ropes, a bunch of green is still expanding. Grandma's hands were covered with green juice, and she stood up, shaking her head with the straw rope, and Solara lifted a large string, which was beyond our expectations. It was very heavy, and my mother came to help, and I and my grandmother carried the vegetable leaves to the wooden shelves that had been prepared long ago. The shelves are simple, two large benches with a flat wooden stick on top of it. Naturally, the stick is elm and strong.
What do you think? After reading it, do you feel that your mouth is full of fragrance, endless charm, and there is an indescribable sense of beauty. It is full of vivid and vivid details, with movements, demeanors, sounds, and colors. In particular, the accurate use of a large number of common verbs in the second paragraph of the text can really be described as seeing people vividly and seeing specific images. There are no words we don't know, and there are no flowery words that we commonly use, and the main strength that supports them is almost all simple nouns and verbs, that is, the colloquial words we use every day—which can be called "prime words".
Let's look at two paragraphs written by the students:
The thin sunlight was cut by the emerald green of a tree, and it was dappled all over the place. The rippling Panyin Lake, the benches under the willow trees ......At the end of the day, I left my tiredness behind and walked on the way out of school. I watched the sunset hang on the branches, the burgundy sun kissed the white clouds, and the slightly drunk cheeks floated with the last enthusiasm of the end of the day. Pairs of birds sing twilight songs in the willow trees of the school. At this moment, the campus is so beautiful!
The feeling of the autumn breeze blowing on the cheeks is like a mother touching the baby's face, so beautiful; The grace of the falling leaves falling slowly is like a pure girl dancing, so beautiful; The posture of the sunset slowly sinking, like a mother who is tired after a day of hard work, is so beautiful. But I think the most beautiful thing is the human heart; The most beautiful thing is the most sincere and flawless love. When you see people's sincere smiles, hear people's cordial greetings, see the children who give up their seats on the bus, and see the teacher's sideburns and cheeky hair as they work at their desks, don't you feel a kind of beauty? The beauty of people's hearts is vividly reflected in ordinary words and deeds. The beauty born out of the ordinary is amazing and convincing: the beauty born out of the ordinary is also thought-provoking and inspiring.
The first paragraph of the text is a little greased, and a lot of so-called good words are used, such as "mottled", "waves", "tired", "kissed", "slightly drunk", etc., but what are the willows, the lake, and the benches, how the sun kisses the white clouds, and how the birds sing ......It's all glimpses, and the reader can't perceive it; It can also be said that they are all described by others, not their own personal discoveries.
The second paragraph of the text is heavy makeup, and there are more gorgeous and good words, such as "touching", "beautiful", "pure", "dancing", "sincere and flawless", "face moving", "incisive" and so on. Although I know the skill of ranking, because it is not my true feelings, I lack the strong support of a large number of nouns and verbs, and the accumulation of gorgeous and colorful words, so I can't convey the real beauty, but it makes people a little annoying.
In response to this situation, Mr. Wang Li has long said that many people who write articles now, "I think in my heart, I am writing articles now, which is different from speaking, I should write a little more prose, add more rhetoric, add more political terms, and make more detours." When these people were in the upper grades of elementary school and junior high school, the essays were originally very smooth, but in high school and college, the essays became more and more incomprehensible. The problem is that they mistakenly believe that the more the article, the better; They do not understand that an article is divorced from the spoken language and the language of the masses of the people, and can never become an accurate, distinct, and vivid article. ”
Writer Zhang Wei said: "The most powerful words in Chinese are nouns and verbs, which are the bones of language. The main reason for the lack of fluffy and bloated language is the excessive use of adjectives and the like. Sentences are like people, they must be **, they must be capable, and this is the line and handsome. The pursuit of beauty, without fundamentally solving the problem, just endlessly applying cosmetics, will only be counterproductive. ”
Language training is the basic skill of writing essays. If you want to practice kung fu well, you should start by using the "prime" of nouns and verbs. When you master the "secrets of the rivers and lakes" of "plain words", you will have the handy pen power, and of course, you can also achieve the realm of mastery and wonderful brushwork.