It is proposed to combine folk songs with old poems to produce new style poems. Throughout his discourse on poetry, the new style of poetry he conceived is to use new language and new thinking to write new life, shape new images, and express new emotions. As long as one of these five new elements is a new style poem, the more new elements there are, the more new colors there are. Lei Shenglong has created a lot of such new style poems.
The summer of the Lunar Calendar
It is hot in Shenzhou, and it is still not cool in autumn.
Three parts of the climate, seven parts of the knife lang.
Lei Haiji commented:
In the early autumn of Guimao, the heat has not disappeared, and the new song of Daolang on the Internet has set off a boom again. The poem skillfully combines the two kinds of heat, and the fun is suddenly born. There is a strong atmosphere of the times, and a new life is written. The sharing technique used, sharing a "hot" word, deliberately mixing the weather heat with the Daolang heat, is unreasonable, and the sharing technique is a new thinking.
The feeling of accompanying his wife and daughter to the store
The second merchant shop, like a service soldier.
Overtired and overloaded, helpless is family affection.
Lei Haiji commented:
This work has fewer words and more highlights. The first is to write about daily life, which is natural and intimate to read. The second is to connect super fatigue with family affection, fatigue is to pay, family affection is enjoyment, enjoyment needs to be paid first, and only after paying can you enjoy. The third is to contain human feelings and affairs, such a family life is the common feeling of people, and it is also the reason for doing things. Do things diligently, even overloaded, and don't be lazy. Fourth, the poem is short but interesting, interesting, and I can't help but laugh when I read it. "Orderly" and "overloaded" are new words, writing a new life in a new language.
Tracing the old place - small mountain pond
Turning over the mud and splashing water on the small mountain pond, I caught an eel three feet long.
Garlic and ginger sand are boiled in a pot, and the neighbors are invited to taste it together.
Lei Haiji commented:
The plain language hides a strong local flavor and a simple human touch. This work has both the style of folk songs and the charm of the old style poems, and can be regarded as the new style poems in the minds of ***.
Accompany my father to play chess
The old father likes to play catalpa for many years, but it is difficult to find a stubborn friend.
The four brothers took turns to be happy.
Lei Haiji commented:
Smooth and easy to read, and there is a breath of life, human touch, the father's distinct personality is cute, and the brothers' filial piety to the old man is clearly visible. Full of positive energy, full of fun.
There was a great drought in the year of Renyin
Summer drought and autumn summer, there are many red fields in China.
The peasants looked at the sky and sighed, hating the Milky Way.
Lei Haiji commented:
It is fluent and easy to read, bold in imagination, and visible in love with the people. Shanglian has done enough foreshadowing, and the move of poking the galaxy is a matter of course. "Hate not poke the Milky Way", with a surreal approach. Colloquial, but poetic.
Rhyme Tanabata again
There are many poems when the festival comes, and thousands of psalms have been sent.
The Cowherd and the Weaver Girl are looking for no shadow, and the Yinhan Xingqiao letter has waves.
The ridiculous rhyme is stained with the old age, and it can be sad to dye the old times.
The heavenly court is in charge of the affairs of the gods, why should we think about it.
Lei Haiji commented:
The poem is smooth and easy to read. What is interesting is to look at the meeting of the Cowherd and the Weaver Girl on the Magpie Bridge from another perspective, and the affairs of the two of them are under the control of the Heavenly Court, and there is no need for mortals to worry about it. It also expounds on human affairs, which is different from most Qixi poems, which is refreshing. It can be seen that the author's thinking is extraordinary.
Door link
The world is festive, and there are a few reds in front of the door.
How many dreams in ancient and modern times are all in the words.
Lei Haiji commented:
The next link is quite exciting, the door union is auspicious and good, don't look at the words, the beautiful dreams are in it. And the language is very tense. There are many ancient and modern things, and there are many words. A few words, few words. The contrast is stark. It's all there, and the power of writing a piece of words. Couplet beauty, dream beauty, poetry beauty. "A few reds in front of the door" is an overly jumpy language, and it is also a compressed paragraph, which belongs to the new stream-of-consciousness thinking.
Think about it across the glass plank road
The cliff is overhanging, and one step is frightening.
Why is it in a high position, everyone is afraid of transparency.
Lei Haiji commented:
The author makes good use of keyword thinking to create an artistic conception. From "glass plank road" to "cliff", then to "frightened", to "high position", and finally to "fear of transparency". These key words construct a complete art form, and come to the conclusion that "high positions are afraid of transparency", which is meaningful, and it is written about the glass plank road, which refers to life and society. From the perspective of the creative thinking order, there should be a "high position afraid of transparency" first, and then find keywords. The key words should not only be found from the scene of the glass plank road, but also draw out the conclusion that "the high position is afraid of transparency". The difficulty is quite large. "Glass plank road" is a new word, writing a new life in a new language.
Dried bacon in the countryside
The New Year is approaching, and the house is full of incense.
It's not that the market is fresh and the supply is small, and the ancestral taste is unforgettable.
Lei Haiji commented:
The following penmanship is classic, with a negative affirmative sentence, the previous sentence denies that there is less fresh meat in the market, and the next sentence affirms that the taste of smoked bacon is unforgettable. It not only strengthens the good of smoked bacon, but also makes the language ups and downs, poetic twists and turns, fresh and smart. Here's the beauty of the poem. It is full of local flavor.
Mr. Lei Shenglong's poems use poetic colloquial language to write about his own life, fluent and easy to read, with a strong sense of self and intimacy. The imagination is rich and bold, lyrical and natural, witty, multi-meaningful, revealing human feelings, and enlightening. He attaches great importance to using new thinking, new language, writing new life, and excavating new poetry. Poetry is a language style similar to a folk song, without losing the poetic flavor, poetry, and poetic beauty. There are so many new elements in these works, it can be said that he is a new style poet.
Poet: Lei ShenglongHan nationality, native of Poyang, Jiangxi, member of the Chinese Poetry Society, former deputy researcher of Shangrao Finance Bureau, director of the Chinese Poetry Association Research Association, member of the Chinese Poetry Society, and vice president of the Shangrao Poetry Society. He has published "Five Hundred Thunder Poems" in four volumes.
Commentator: Lei HeijiJiangxi Jinxian, military poet, poetry critic, once served as the political commissar of a unit of the People's Liberation Army, with the rank of colonel. He has edited and published "Poetry Quick Start Guide", "Ancient and Modern Famous Writers on Poetry Quotations", "Good Poetry Creation - Lei Haiji's Selected Poems", "Lei Haiji's Selected Works: Poetry Volume", "Lei Haiji's Selected Works: Theory Volume".
Editor: Zhang Xuefang, review, Xiaolou listening to the rain, proofreader: Feng Xiao